Language Evaluation @ NUS Alumni

NUS Alumni Chapter Meeting 13 November 2015

Brickbats

1. Grammar
(a) plural

• NUS Alumni Toastmaster Club => NUS Alumni Toastmasters Club
• I could go oversea to study => I could go overseas to study
• I have three question => I have three questions
• A lot of thing can went wrong => A lot of things can go wrong
• will have many happy moment => will have many happy moments
• school holiday => school holidays

(b) tenses

• I still feel very happy for that => I still felt very happy about that
• A lot of us are stretch to the full => Many of us are stretched to the full
• I seek for help => I sought for help
• When the earthquake strike => when the earthquake struck
• In order to be qualify for voting => In order to qualify for voting

(c) subject-verb agreement

• Someone who is passionate about volunteer work and enjoy travelling => Someone who is passionate about volunteer work and enjoys travelling 

2. Vocabulary 

• fang xue le! => 6pm! Time to knock off! (Avoid using Mandarin, unless necessary and include translation)
• I am the TME for this evening. => I am the TME for tonight's meeting.
• for those who are doing their P1 speech => for those who are presenting their P1 speeches
• someone who will take care of our pause-fillers => someone who will take note of our pause-fillers
• you will hear the bell, in which you have to stop. => you will hear the bell, after which you have to stop.
• who doesn't not make wrong choices => who does not make wrong choices
• speak on the feet => think on your feet, speak off the cuff
• lame and nonsense stuff => lame and nonsensical stuff
• culture differences => cultural differences
• We should not feel sad of Singapore => We should not feel sad for Singapore

3. Sentence Structure

• Congratulations on completing your Project 1 and I just move on to your Project 2 speech => Congratulations on completing your Project 1 speech and I strongly encourage you to move on to your Project 2 speech
• Samsung is fighting against Apple. => Samsung can give Apple a run for their money.

Bouquets

1. Alliteration

• market mechanism
• bend backwards
• idleness is ideal

2. Rhyme

• We should not just survive; we should thrive.
• anything and everything is up for sale

3. Metaphor

• one of our club's newest collection (referring to a new member)
• People think that I bite. I won't bite but don't step on my tail.
• When I look back at this chapter of my life...
• Marketisation sharpens the sting of inequality.
• crowd out the values we seek to create
• You are the speech
• There is a big teddy bear in him. (referring to Lau Kwong Fook)
• Wisdom is the name they attache to four of your teeth.

4. Parallel structure

• No mountain too high, no river too wide
• moral and civic goods that market do not honour, and that money can't buy.

5. Vocabulary

• fixated on issues without caring about people's emotions => fixated means to have an obsessive attachment

6. Contrast

• Instead of letting changes happen to you, let the change come from within yourself.
• Instead of seeing change as negative, view it as an opportunity to learn a new skill.

5 TIPS ON FORMING ALLITERATIVE PHRASES

Alliteration refers to the repetition of the beginning sounds of words, as in “Peter Piper picked a peck of pickled peppers”, “long-lived”, and “the fickle finger of fate”.  

Alliteration makes great tongue twisters! They also add lyrical beauty to your writing.

However, note that it’s the sounds of words that must repeat, not the spelling. Thus, ‘honest’ and ‘humble’ are not alliterative, neither are ‘charismatic’ and ‘charming’.

In Toastmasters Competent Communicator Manual project 4 How to Say It, speakers are encouraged to use rhetorical devices to enhance and emphasize ideas. Alliteration is one of the easiest rhetorical device to use.

Here are 5 tips on forming alliterative phrases to add impact and beauty to your writing:

(1) Adjective + Noun

This is the easiest way to form an alliterative phrase.  Take a noun and think of an adjective that begins with the same sound. Pair them up and hey presto! you get an alliterative phrase.

Here are some examples: “clumsy clown”, “sensational speaker”, “towering tree”, “bungling burglar”, “terrified teacher”, “gentle giant”,  “decadent dessert”, “pink panther”, “Magic Mike” etc.   

(2) Adjective + Adjective

Another way to form alliteration is by using two adjoining adjectives that begin with the same sound to describe the same thing or person.

For example, “big, bad wolf”, “that man is crude and crass”, “a confident and charismatic speaker”, "a poised and polished presenter", “the performance was entertaining and enthralling”, “an effervescent and effusive person”, “The storm was unrelenting and unstoppable” etc

(3) Verb + Verb

Another common way to form alliteration is by having two verbs that begin with the same sound.

For example, “He hemmed and hawed”, “the doctor poked and prodded me”, “the girl banged and bawled”, “frame and focus”, “mumbled and muttered under his breath” etc.

(4) Noun + Noun

Having two nouns that begin with the same sound is also a great way to alliterate.

For example, “tips and techniques”, “the next buzz and bing”, “the prince and the pauper”, "Superman and Spiderman" etc.

(5) Adverb + Adjective / Verb + Adverb

An adverb (usually a word ending with –ly) can easily be paired with an adjective or a verb to create alliteration.  

For the former, the adverb comes before the adjective.

For example, “disturbingly delicious desserts”, “exuberantly executed performance”, “painstakingly painted piece of art”, “disgustingly dirty socks” etc.

In the latter case, the adverb comes after the verb.

For example, “perspiring profusely”, “hummed happily”, “stared at me sinisterly”, “laughed light-heartedly” etc.

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By using these combinations of alliteration, you can easily come up with alliterative triads or even your own tongue-twisters!

Round and round the rugged rock the ragged rascal ran! (from Dictionary.com)

Jolly Joni jests about jiving in jet planes jovially. 

When you come across any wonderful examples of alliteration while reading or listening to speeches, write them down in a notebook. This will become your treasure trove of alliterative phrases that you can refer to again and again for inspiration.

3 TIPS ON USING ALLITERATIVE TRIADS

Alliteration refers to the repetition of the beginning sounds of words, as in "Peter Piper picked a peck of pickled peppers", "long-lived", "short shrift" and "the fickle finger of fate".
(from dictionary.com)

A triad is a group of three, especially of three closely related persons or things. (from dictionary.com)

Put the two together and you get ALLITERATIVE TRIADS, that means groups of three words beginning with the same sounds. 

I love alliterative triads. I like to use them in my speeches and evaluations. It helps me to remember my points easily too!

Here are 3 tips on making alliterative triads work for you.

(1) Use alliterative triads as heading for the points in your speech. 
Let's say in your speech, you want to share three points. Think of three words all beginning with the same sounds that can describe these points succinctly.

Here are some examples from my own speeches:

3 things you lose when you have a baby: sleep, sex, sanity
(Read the speech Are You Ready? here)

3 things you put up with when you have a baby: pee, poo, puke
(Read the speech Perils of Parenting here)

3 ways to win a man's heart: food, fantasy, freedom
(Read the speech How to Train a Man here)

(2) Use alliterative triads to describe a person or thing vividly in your speech. 
You can use three adjectives to describe a person. For example, "John is a cool, calm and confident speaker", or "The dashing, dapper and debonair hunk caught everyone's attention."

A cafe used an alliterative triad to describe their offerings as "disturbingly delicious desserts". How cool is that?

(3) Use alliterative triads in your project evaluations.
Using alliterative triads in my project evaluations helps me to remember my points easily. In a club evaluation contest in 2010, I used 3 Ss for the commendations and 3 Es for the recommendations. 

I commended the speaker for her smooth delivery, sincerity and stories. The recommendations were expression, energy and effective use of grammar. (Read the evaluation speech here)

I also used this technique in the District 80 Evaluation Contest in 2010 which helped me to clinch the champion trophy! (Read the evaluation speech here)

By using alliterative triads, you can add value, verve, vitality to your speech. Try it!