Last week, I had the joy of visiting NUS Alumni TMC to evaluate a Project 4 speech. The speech title was "There are no ugly women, only lazy ones". P4 focuses on use of words, rhetorical devices and proper grammar and pronunciation.
My evaluation points included two commendations (IR) and two recommendations (GP).
COMMENDATIONS:
I Introduction
The speaker uses questions in her introduction to engage the audience. The questions were direct and simple to understand, which allowed the audience to respond easily.
R Rhetorical devices
The speaker was able to use rhetorical devices such as alliteration (e.g. picture perfect, ladies are lovely, forefront of fashion) and metaphors (e.g. gentle bashful guys transform into women-hungry wolves, for every cloud there is a silver lining) to spice up her speech.
RECOMMENDATIONS:
G Grammar
Incorrect grammar was used in some instances. For example, in the sentence "I was expecting for more", for is redundant. The phrase "to bring around him and his friends from Germany" is better rephrased as "to bring him and his friends from Germany around Singapore". In the phrase "we went into great lengths", the correct preposition should be to, as in "we went to great lengths".
P Pronunciation
Pronunciation of some words were incorrect. For example, 'infamous', 'fizzled off' and 'gigantic'.
In conclusion, leverage on your strengths of using questions to engage the audience and rhetorical devices to emphasize your points. Work on your grammar and pronunciation and rehearse your speech to perfection. Then you will be able to dazzle your audience with speeches that exhibit greater finesse and pizzazz.
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